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Sacrifice

by Susan Cowger 5 Comments

Just a flower. But life. Oh it would have faded and died anyway. Never the less, a life given for my pleasure. Makes me want to say thank you…to the flower? to God?

~

Water and a knife
Slender neck measured and slit
Sacrificial rose

~

April 29, 2009 Blog

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  1. Craig Schafer says

    May 6, 2009 at 6:59 am

    Blogger EP Hemingweigh said…here is the second of three
    which is a better version

    leaning close awkward
    pause turned up cushions to no
    avail lost gone

    or

    stained air maladroit
    lull altered fibers to no
    avail lost gone
    April 29, 2009 1:33 PM

    Blogger EP Hemingweigh said… i really like the first one to of this haiku version
    thanks for all the advice on the haikus it is hard to get these right
    and i dont really know what that anthropomorphism is
    April 29, 2009 10:04 PM

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  2. Susan Cowger says

    May 1, 2009 at 4:57 am

    SCOOOOOOOOTTTT!!! Git over here and explain anthropomorphism!

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  3. Craig Schafer says

    April 30, 2009 at 6:04 am

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  4. Susan Cowger says

    April 29, 2009 at 10:29 pm

    I prefer the first one with one word perhaps changed–instead of “to” in the second line, you could use “with”. That way the second line has meaning all its own without the connection to the first and third line. Making each line of a haiku carry meaning that makes sense apart from its connection to the other lines is one of the hardest things to make happen smoothly in haiku.

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  5. Craig Schafer says

    April 29, 2009 at 9:33 pm

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